Sunday, September 7, 2014

COMMUNITY SERVICE

Letter to Administrators

     The strength of this letter is telling the administrators why community service should not be a requirement but on a voluntary basis only. The weakness is their letter is over written with a lot repetitive sentences, misspelled words, sarcasm to faculty members.
     They portray themselves as child like, thinking only of themselves not the community around them. Their examples for not doing community service include athletics,watching television,social activities, and dating. In one sentence they explain how their job is to get an education but they go on about how their social life is very important.
     As I continued to read  I noticed  "their" in class that should be  "they are" in class,
" their" are many should read "there are" many,they use "waist "of time in stead of "waste", "an" the faculty should be "and ". There are fragmented sentences, punctuation errors, and their grammar is not used correctly.
     Instead of writing a well thought out letter to the faculty explaining the pros and cons of making community service a requirement, they wrote a rude and arrogant letter and that is not the way to make a sound argument.

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